Comment Comment by coldtea Not as good.Merely goes for the surprise element.The other quote also:1) gives more plot information (the hero is an older man, sentenced to death),2) beautifully evokes his nostalgia before death (remembering an event from his childhood)3) AND builds suspense: He is at the moment in front of the firing squad. Will he die? Get a pardon? Somehow be resqued? parent coldtea 12 years ago
Merely goes for the surprise element.
The other quote also:
1) gives more plot information (the hero is an older man, sentenced to death),
2) beautifully evokes his nostalgia before death (remembering an event from his childhood)
3) AND builds suspense: He is at the moment in front of the firing squad. Will he die? Get a pardon? Somehow be resqued?