I can't help but wonder how effective those memos would have been if he'd been more direct, rather than use manager-speak. Passive voice just doesn't work when you want to get people to take action.
Certain of our competitors' products and their rapid advancement and refinement of new usage scenarios have been quite noteworthy
could have been:
Our competitors are out-innovating us, and we're losing to them. I hate to lose and you should hate being losers too. So this is what we're going to do.
Certain of our competitors' products and their rapid advancement and refinement of new usage scenarios have been quite noteworthy
could have been:
Our competitors are out-innovating us, and we're losing to them. I hate to lose and you should hate being losers too. So this is what we're going to do.