Comment by hawkharris

Alex, you're a very skilled storyteller. I enjoyed reading the post.

I have one small piece of constructive feedback: your use of commas was a little confusing at times, and it slowed down my reading.

Commas can be tricky, and I sometimes struggle with them as well. Here's a quick guide that I find useful:

http://www.grammarbook.com/punctuation/commas.asp