Thank you for taking the time to do a thorough read, I just skimmed it, and the prose is certainly not for me. To me it lacks focus, but as you say, this may be the style the readers enjoy.
And it also, as you say, really reuses words. Just reading I notice "phosphorescence" 4 times for example in this chapter, or "ooze" 17 times (!).
It is very impressive though that it can create a somewhat cohesive storyline, and certainly an improvement over previous models.
And it also, as you say, really reuses words. Just reading I notice "phosphorescence" 4 times for example in this chapter, or "ooze" 17 times (!).
It is very impressive though that it can create a somewhat cohesive storyline, and certainly an improvement over previous models.