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Comment by Closi

Pretty amazing effort, this looks like a great labour of love!

I can't give feedback on the code/technology, but on the writing on the lore section, I would try to simplify the writing. For instance the following:

> The reverberations of the trumpet stirred the knights from their deep repose, igniting a tumultuous awakening. With swords unsheathed and hearts ablaze, they clashed in a thunderous symphony of war, each seeking to claim dominance over the waking realm.

Feels too ornate (purple prose) and could be more directly put as:

> The trumpet’s call jolted the knights from their rest. Swords drawn and hearts alight, they clashed in a fierce battle, each striving for dominance.

I'm not an author or anything, but a little bit of copy writing could help - although this might just be me as it's probably a matter of personal taste!

parent Closi 2 years ago

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