I love this.
Inevitably I want to make some improvements.
> “He laughed with the kind of booming abandon that made the whole restaurant turn around and look.”
The kind of? If it's a kind that exists generically then we can't have a past tense, so:
“He laughed with the kind of booming abandon that *makes* the whole restaurant turn around and look.”
But really, why emphasise it being generic? This is better:
“He laughed with *a* booming abandon that made the whole restaurant turn around and look.”
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> Use lists where relevant, because it’s easier to read a bulleted list of items than to read a paragraph with the same information.
Use lists only where all the items have the same status, in some sense. An ordinary paragraph can't be broken up into bullet points.
Inevitably I want to make some improvements.
> “He laughed with the kind of booming abandon that made the whole restaurant turn around and look.”
The kind of? If it's a kind that exists generically then we can't have a past tense, so:
“He laughed with the kind of booming abandon that *makes* the whole restaurant turn around and look.”
But really, why emphasise it being generic? This is better:
“He laughed with *a* booming abandon that made the whole restaurant turn around and look.”
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> Use lists where relevant, because it’s easier to read a bulleted list of items than to read a paragraph with the same information.
Use lists only where all the items have the same status, in some sense. An ordinary paragraph can't be broken up into bullet points.