Interesting story, but I've got to complain about the inset text boxes:
> Someone out there is probably mentally screaming at me "you fool!" at this point.
These are each clearly building up to "some explanation" of what the author should have done instead, indicating precisely what his foolish actions were and why. Perhaps we're just supposed to know that, but this is never directly explained in the story and I found it a little upsetting.
> Someone out there is probably mentally screaming at me "you fool!" at this point.
These are each clearly building up to "some explanation" of what the author should have done instead, indicating precisely what his foolish actions were and why. Perhaps we're just supposed to know that, but this is never directly explained in the story and I found it a little upsetting.