Comment Comment by solumos Is this supposed to be like Stripe for student loans? It's extremely unclear what the problem is, who has the problem, and how you're solving it.> Give your products student loan superpowersNot clear who your audience is here. Mobile games? Disposable razors? CBD gummies? Savings accounts? Whose products is this for?> Use our API to create life-changing student loan outcomes for your customers - freeing up cash they can save, invest and spendSame here. Are you going to give my disposable razor customers life-changing outcomes?I'd recommending killing all of your copy and replacing it with 10% of the word count, except targeted at the specific problem you're solving. parent solumos 5 years ago
> Give your products student loan superpowers
Not clear who your audience is here. Mobile games? Disposable razors? CBD gummies? Savings accounts? Whose products is this for?
> Use our API to create life-changing student loan outcomes for your customers - freeing up cash they can save, invest and spend
Same here. Are you going to give my disposable razor customers life-changing outcomes?
I'd recommending killing all of your copy and replacing it with 10% of the word count, except targeted at the specific problem you're solving.