Something I will never understand... your character never uses personal pronouns in reference to their self.
And I don't mean gendered pronouns, just pronouns like "I" and "We". It seems none of the characters do.
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Instead of: "I need to get lunch"
It's: "Need to get lunch."
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"We need to get in there, and we need to do it fast"
"Need to get in there. Need to do it fast"
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"I'm tryin' alright?"
"Tryin' alright?
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"I like chocolate"
"Like chocolate"
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It's even more grating when you add in the forced sounding "Gruff Guy" voice the male V uses. I don't know what kind of weird tough guy vibe they were going for but it's like nails on a chalkboard sometimes.
And I don't mean gendered pronouns, just pronouns like "I" and "We". It seems none of the characters do.
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Instead of: "I need to get lunch"
It's: "Need to get lunch."
-
"We need to get in there, and we need to do it fast"
"Need to get in there. Need to do it fast"
-
"I'm tryin' alright?"
"Tryin' alright?
-
"I like chocolate"
"Like chocolate"
-
It's even more grating when you add in the forced sounding "Gruff Guy" voice the male V uses. I don't know what kind of weird tough guy vibe they were going for but it's like nails on a chalkboard sometimes.