- on first glance i don't get the idea of the site, somehow not even compelled to start the video (maybe try a more "compelling" preview-screen there)
- some "bussines buzzwords" like Online Conversation and Audiences . .. maybe try a quote instead (ask a friend if you dont want do make one up) in the quote, state the one or max. two TOP benefits i have from the site.. and also give me a hint who needs your thing. like:
"lloquy helps me maximize my readers engagement.." (Jon Doe, BigBlog.com)
- signup might increase with a green or orange signup button, conveys success and gets attention
I think you really need a 1-sentence pitch to tell whats the benefit for me as a user? (answer for what? so what? now what?)
- on first glance i don't get the idea of the site, somehow not even compelled to start the video (maybe try a more "compelling" preview-screen there)
- some "bussines buzzwords" like Online Conversation and Audiences . .. maybe try a quote instead (ask a friend if you dont want do make one up) in the quote, state the one or max. two TOP benefits i have from the site.. and also give me a hint who needs your thing. like: "lloquy helps me maximize my readers engagement.." (Jon Doe, BigBlog.com)
- signup might increase with a green or orange signup button, conveys success and gets attention
I think you really need a 1-sentence pitch to tell whats the benefit for me as a user? (answer for what? so what? now what?)
Best regards Patric